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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 10:07 Do 04.06.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo
Etwas zum korrigieren
In contrast to Bernard, Helmholtz is a very successful man, who is adored of many women. He is also very intelligent and has a lot of qualities. He is a good sportman, works in many committee and is appreciated from many friends. His personality seems to be flawless. And almost superhuman. Likewise as his friend Bernard he is discontent because his work doesnt challenge him. He looks for his own truth beyond the official Propoganda in Brave new World.
Therefore he reads critically poems and try to convey critical ideas about the system to his student. (Ist die Satzstellung ok?)
He helps John to prevent the distribution of soma, but doesnt struggle again his banishment. He understands Johns attitude, but isnt able to understand completely the Shakepeare-reception.
Linda isnt completely adapted to the Reservation world, so that he has varying her partner constantly. Therefore she becomes to the target of the other women. Because he is psychical and moral at the end (am ende sein) he needs very strong medication what ruins her health.
Danke
Gruss Dinker
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 19:05 Do 04.06.2009 | | Autor: | Amano |
In contrast to Bernard, Helmholtz is a very successful man, who is adored of many women.
adored by
He is also very intelligent and has a lot of qualities. He is a good sportman, works in many committee and is appreciated from many friends.
sportsman
many commitees
appreciated by
His personality seems to be flawless. And almost superhuman.
kein Punkt vor And (leitet einen Nebensatz ein)
Likewise as his friend Bernard he is discontent because his work doesnt challenge him. He looks for his own truth beyond the official Propoganda in Brave new World.
Likewise passt hier nicht: Just as his friend...
Discontent ist das Substantiv
Propaganda - Kleinschreibung
Therefore he reads critically poems and try to convey critical ideas about the system to his student. (Ist die Satzstellung ok?)
Entweder 'he reads poems critically' oder 'he reads critical poems', kommt drauf an was du sagen willst
he tries
Satzstellung ist gut.
Ist es wirklich nur ein Student? Andernfalls muesstest du das Plural-S dranhaengen.
He helps John to prevent the distribution of soma, but doesnt struggle again his banishment.
Struggle? Was willst du sagen?
He understands Johns attitude, but isnt able to understand completely the Shakepeare-reception.
to fully understand Shakespeare.
Linda isnt completely adapted to the Reservation world, so that he has varying her partner constantly.
he has to
Verstehe nicht was varying her partner sein soll.
Therefore she becomes to the target of the other women. Because he is psychical and moral at the end (am ende sein) he needs very strong medication what ruins her health.
he is ruined (moralisch am Ende) and burnt out (psychisch am Ende)
which damages her health
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(Frage) beantwortet | | Datum: | 10:26 Fr 05.06.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo
Danke für deine Korrekturen
> He helps John to prevent the distribution of soma, but
> doesnt struggle again his banishment.
> Struggle? Was willst du sagen?
Dass er sich nicht gegen seine Verbannung wehrt.
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> Linda isnt completely adapted to the Reservation world, so
> that she has varying her partner constantly.
> he has to
> Verstehe nicht was varying her partner sein soll.
Dass sie ihre Partner ständig gewechselt hat
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Danke
Gruss DInker
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(Antwort) fertig | | Datum: | 10:41 Fr 05.06.2009 | | Autor: | Amano |
aber er wehrt sich nicht gegen seine Verbannung.
but he doesn't fight against/ appeal against his banishment.
> Linda isnt completely adapted to the Reservation world, so
> that she has varying her partner constantly.
> he has to
> Verstehe nicht was varying her partner sein soll.
Dass sie ihre Partner ständig gewechselt hat
Linda hasn't entirely adapted yet to the 'Reservation world' (ich gehe mal davon aus, dass 'Reservation world' ein feststehender Begriff ist!?)
da sie haeufig ihre Partner wechselt.
since she is frequently changing partners.
Hier muesstest du eigentlich dazuschreiben, warum dies ein Zeichen dafuer ist, dass sie sich nicht ganz angepasst hat. Schreibt die Reservation World denn vor, dass man nur einen Partner ueber einen langen Zeitraum haben sollte?
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