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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 13:15 Di 01.05.2007 | | Autor: | amer17 |
| Aufgabe | Könnte mir jemand diesen kurzen Aufsatz über "dreams" korrigieren und dann vielleicht ein paar Tipps dazu geben.
danke |
Ich habe diese Frage in keinem Forum auf anderen Internetseiten gestellt.
Dreams aren’t unnatural as many people think. Everyone had once a dream, but the fact is we forget our dreams when we awake up in the morning. One theory says that in dreams we work up our experience of the day before. The theory may be right, but what about the scenes in nightmares which we never have seen before? Anyway, I like dreams no matter if I dream nightmares or awesome dreams. The so called falling dream is the one I dream nearly every night. All of a sudden I think I’m falling out of my bed, but what have to be mentioned is that I haven’t a deep sleep. While I’m falling I’m still conscious but it can also be that I’m over-worked. I’ve heard of these predictions and some say they believe in this nonsense and others say that they can’t tell predictions, as you can see I’m the one who don’t believe in such stuff. If we knew the future the mankind wouldn’t be in a bad situation like we had nowadays.
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Hi amer17!
Die fett markierten Wörter sind die berichtigten Fehler.
Den letzten Satz (kursiv) habe ich komplett anders formuliert, weil die Satzstellung irgendwie sehr abstrus war und da einige Fehler drin waren.
Achte besonders auf die Stellung der Adverbien!!
Wenn du Fragen hast, was du falsch gemacht hast, dann frag einfach nochmal nach 
Dreams arent as unnatural as many people think. Everyone once had a dream, but the fact is that we forget our dreams when we wake up in the morning. One theory says that in dreams we assimilate our experiences of the previous day. The theory may be right, but what about the scenes in nightmares which we have never seen before? Anyway, I like dreams no matter whether I have nightmares or awesome dreams. The so-called falling dream is the one I nearly dream every night. All of a sudden I think I would be falling out of my bed, but I have to mention that I am not fast asleep. While Im falling Im still conscious, might be that I'm over-worked.
I've heard that there are people who believe in the theory of predicting dreams, but as you can see I do not believe in such a stuff. If we knew about the future, mankind wouldn't be in a situation as bad as the one we are in nowadays.
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(Frage) beantwortet | | Datum: | 17:16 Mi 02.05.2007 | | Autor: | amer17 |
| Aufgabe | | thx vielmals, kannst mir irgendwelche tipps geben, wie ich meine satzstellungsfehler vermeiden kann |
Dreams aren’t as unnatural as many people think. Everyone once had a dream, but the fact is that we forget our dreams when we wake up in the morning. One theory says that in dreams we assimilate our experiences of the previous day. The theory may be right, but what about the scenes in nightmares which we have never seen before? Anyway, I like dreams no matter whether I have nightmares or awesome dreams. The so-called falling dream is the one I nearly dream every night. All of a sudden I think I would be falling out of my bed, but I have to mention that I am not fast asleep. While I’m falling I’m still conscious, might be that I'm over-worked.
I've heard that there are people who believe in the theory of predicting dreams, but as you can see I do not believe in such a stuff. If we knew about the future, mankind wouldn't be in a situation as bad as the one we are in nowadays.
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Hey du ![[winken]](/images/smileys/winken.gif "[winken]") ,
Prinzipiell würde ich dir raten, "Grammatik des heutigen Englisch" von Klett dir anzuschaffen und da immer mal wieder reinschauen - das bringt es wirklich! Du hast die Möglichkeit, dir diese Grammatik auf Deutsch und auf Englisch zu kaufen. Aber nicht gleich zur deutschen Ausgabe greifen, wirklich vorher gut abwägen, was für einen selber besser ist. Für die Oberstufe würde ich die Englische vorschlagen 
Du bist ja in der 11 - also NOCH (!) genug Zeit, deine selbstgeschriebenen Texte deiner LeherIn abzugeben und dir diese korrigieren lassen. Und dann einfach mal 10 Minuten hinsetzen und sich mit der korrigierten HA auseinander setzen.
Liebe Grüße,
Sarah
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